Reading and Writing Assignments for 8/11/16 23 rd class

Here is Berry's response and an interesting one it is:

 

From structure, first,there are two lines through the book,one is contemporary,the other is ancient. And we told about the relationship between two lines,maybe now we not see the relationship of the two main lines,but there will certain be a core point make them in series. I think the common element which connect them is water. Water,is also the essential point of title and theory.( A Long Walk to Water.) And from the title,we should notice the word---Long. it shows that protagonists met a lot of frustrations to get water.Such as Nya must spent so much time to go to the pond in order to get water for her sister,Akeer or Salva must throughout the desert to find water.

Nya's story describes that she need to pay much effort to get water which is so far away from her house to support her family. Salva's story describes that because of the war, Salva struggled to find food and water to survive along with avoiding gunmen and he never give up to find his family.
About ending,umm.... i really don't think Salva is Nya's relative because there are just 23 years discrepancy.(1985-2008) so.... i guess maybe they will meet at some point because of water ,or when Salva grow up,he will be a volunteer,to find assistance from other countries to get water，alleviate the situation of water resource of Sudan,so he meet Nya to offer help.

About evidence... because the most important element is water,so.. i think the point of connection is water.in 1985 Slava just 11 years old,in 2008,Nya is 11,too.so i don't think they are relative, i am inclined to my point as i said. furthermore，Salva meet how Sudan was short of water by himself,so i think he will be more like to be a volunteer.

I love how you think Berry. You think like a scholar of literature, looking carefully at the words and considering their associations. Absolutely, the word "long" is extremely important to the story and its meaning. Throughout there are long walks for both "protagonists" (great that you use this word), and it will be a long while before the walks are no longer necessary.  And you are certainly on the right track about how Salva will "alleviate" the problem of water scarcity. Some of the words you use here are very advanced and they are used in exactly the right context, for instance "discrepancy."  

But this is my favorite part: "because the most important element is water,so.. i think the point of connection is water." Again, written like a scholar of literature and very astute!

 

In Linda Sue Park's A Long Walk to Water, the author wrote about two stories, same place, different periods. One story is about a girl, Nya, looking for water for her family and medicine for her sick sister. The other one is about a boy, Salva looking for his family and trying to be away from the war. The two stories will get together for sure. And I think that Nya is Salva's daughter because we can learn it from the book that Salva was born in about 1973 and Nya was born in about 1996. And the author never mentioned Nya's father, so he may be Salva. They are also in the same clan, Dinka. As we know, Salva had went to Ethiopia, and Nya will may go there to look for the doctor who can cure her sister, so the will may meet at Ethiopia.

This is excellent!!! I love it. The reasoning is very solid and the writing is both clear and grammatically correct. Some of your sentences also show a real ability to vary the traditional sentence structure without losing clarity, for instance:"In Linda Sue Park's A Long Walk to Water, the author wrote about two stories, same place, different periods."  That last phrase with its parallel structure, "same place, different periods" for emphasis is perfect.

Wonderful use of transitions like "As we know." Nicely written conclusion makes the writing come full circle. Terrific work!

In the book A Long Walk of Water, Linda Sue Park set up two stories: one is in 2008, Nya and the water scarcity ; the other one is in 1985, Salva and Second Sudanese Civil War. The time is different, people are different, and difficulty is also different. But the place is same, in Sudan. The age is same, in teenage. Nya’s story is about water. She must walk over 8 hours a day to get water to support her parents and her younger sister, Akeer. Then, school, hospital were built in her village, their life become better. Salva’s story is about the war. His family broke in the Second Sudanese Civil War. In the escapes , he met his uncle but his uncle dead. He went to the refugee camp from the Gilo River and grows up there. I think the two stories will come together. Salva grew up, he tried to find his family but it didn’t work. He worked for a charity that helps people with no clean water. And Nya been invited to there and get help from the charity. Then Nya met Salva.

Great, and yet another theory of how the two narratives, or story lines,  come together. I like, too, that stylish opening sentence. Perfect use of the colon and semi colon, plus it's a sentence with an interesting word arrangement that encourages readers to read further.

I like, too, what you did here: "The time is different, people are different, and difficulty is also different. But the place is same, in Sudan."  Parallelism inside short sentences with a contrast at the end, very nice. You are thinking like a writer. I like to see that.