Reading and Writing Assignments 12th Class 5/12/16

Mr Lyndon, the richest man in town, is the owner of the hatchery. He is a strict man. His workers in his factory has to work for a long time and only sleep for four hours every day. The workers serve for the chickens. From that, I can know that Mr Lyndon loves money best, even more than people (the workers in the hatchery). He also let the thugs walk around the hatchery to make sure that there's no workers' union to fight with the boss for more money and more time for rest. So i think Mr Lyndon is a strict man and he loves money.

FABULOUS!  You nailed it! I have a couple of additional comments, but they are minor. This is a great piece of work. And this is a very insightful sentence: "From that, I can know that Mr Lyndon loves money best, even more than people (the workers in the hatchery)"

In the book Kira-Kira, Mr. Lyndon is the owner of the hatchery. He owner the life of the town, lots of people in town works for him. People get money from work, and he is their life and hope. Mr. Lyndon is venerable, because he is the oldest and the most powerful man in the town. Also, when the hatchery power’s out, Katie thinks Mr. Lyndon must been a pretty powerful person to get a man to fix his generator. This point out Mr. Lyndon must be very rich and powerful.

Very nicely put, he owns the life of the town. As always, your insights have a poetic quality to them.  And you are exactly right, his being able to get the generator fixed so quickly is proof of what you say, Mr. Lyndon is a rich and powerful man.  And I'm glad to see you introduced the book in which he is a character.  Good work. I will send you  some additional comments via e-mail as well. 

In Cynthia Kadohata’s Kira-Kira, there was a rich person, Mr. Lyndon. He had a sumptuous house and drove expensive car. In the story, he was the owner of the hatchery that Katie’s father worked for. One day, Katie, Lynn, and Sam went on a picnic at Mr. Lyndon’s property. Unfortunately, a trap hurt Sam. I think that’s not a good way to punish the trespasser. This makes me feel that Mr. Lyndon is a violent and cold-blooded person. I don’t think he put the trap to catch animals. One the day the city’s electric power cut, the workers didn’t want to call him at first. Maybe it was because he wasn’t a kind boss. After they called him, he had someone to fix the power right away because he didn’t want to lose and money. This makes me feel that he is a bad but powerful boss. He didn’t be nice to his workers, for instance, he didn’t allow Katie’s mother and the other workers went to bathroom at unscheduled time. He has a lot of authority because he could fix the problem right away and people would like to help him if he wanted anything. In conclusion, I didn’t like him very much because he wasn’t nice to people, particular his workers or someone that was useless to him. If someday I became as rich as him, I would use my money and power to save people who need help.

This is just tremendous. You get better and better by the week. Your use of transitions is really improving as is your use of evidence from the book.  Each sentence moves smoothly into the next and neatly sets the stage so the reader can follow,

Your use of evidence could not be better: "Unfortunately, a trap hurt Sam. I think that’s not a good way to punish the trespasser. This makes me feel that Mr. Lyndon is a violent and cold-blooded person. I don’t think he put the trap to catch animals. " Absolutely, I don't think for a second tha trap was for animals, and even if it were, it would suggest much the same thing.  I will send you a couple of comments via e-mail.

Great conclusion!