Reading and Writing Assignment for 7th class 1/22/15

1. When I realizedthat my friend had left with out me, I was so mad and I felt like I stored lots of money in many years but a thief had steal all of them away.

2. After the storm, the beach was covered in trash, and it looks like trash had occupation this land.

3. I hate cleaning my room and my mom always says it looks like Japanese devils had swept my room.

4. When I passed the TOEFL test, I was so happy. I felt like I had found a land after the big wave come.

5. My friend is a great runner. When I try to catch up with her, it is like a turtle trying to catch up with a leopard.

Mark, these are great. You definitely know how to create similes. Above all, you understand the point of them--to make the reader really see/feel the experience you describe. That's wonderful. Numbers 4 and 5 are my favorites. That image of the turtle running after the leopard really made me laugh. 

Great work.  

LMF

Hello,Laraine

     When I realized my friend had left without me,I was as mad as a tiger had no food.

   After the storm, the beach was covered in trash,it's like a wasteyard.

     I hate cleaning my room like hate shit,but my mom still always say it looks as awful as a pigs' house.

     When I passed the TOEFL test, I was so happy ,made me like a lost girl had found her parents.

       My friend is a great runner.When I try to catch up with her, She was like lightning.

HI Enya,  I already thought from class that you understood the purpose of a simile. And this assignment showed me I was right. You definitely understand what similes do and how they work.  My favorites are 1, 3, and 5. I particularly like the first one about  the tiger that had no food. The simile really suggests the disappointment of the "I" in the first part.

 I'm going to send you an e-mail with a couple of usage suggestions. But you did a great job. I hope to see some similes in your own writing soon.

Best, Laraine

1. When I realized that my friend had  left without me, I was so mad like a lion lost his prey.

2. After the storm, the beach was covered in trash like nobody cleaned there hundred years ago.

3. I hate cleaning my room and my mom always says it looks awful like a place where pigs live.

4. When I passed the TOEFL test, I was so happy. I felt as a cat has a lot of fish and jump around it.

5. My friend is a great runner. When I try to catch up with her, it's like a turtle want to catch the cheetah.

1. When I realized that my friend had  left without me, I was so mad like a lion lost his prey.

2. After the storm, the beach was covered in trash like nobody cleaned there hundred years ago.

3. I hate cleaning my room and my mom always says it looks awful like a place where pigs live.

4. When I passed the TOEFL test, I was so happy. I felt as a cat has a lot of fish and jump around it.

5. My friend is a great runner. When I try to catch up with her, it's like a turtle want to catch the cheetah.

Great Cindy, You definitely understand how to use similes to help readers better understand an experience.  I really like your being "so mad you felt like a lion that had lost his prey" and being so happy you left "like a cat that had found a lot of fish." My favorite, though, is your simile for what your room looks like when  you don't clean it, "like a place where pigs live." I think this simile has been used by mothers everywhere, the world over.

I will send you some notes on English usage via e-mail, but you did a great job coming up with similes that fit the experience and make it memorable for readers.  Best, Laraine

Cindy, I forgot to say how appropriate the use of the cheetah is, one of the fastest animals on earth. Very fitting. L.