Reading and Writing Assignment for 12/18

    Pearl Buck's The Big Wave tells the story of Jiya and Kino, two young boys who spend their days swimming and fishing.  Jiya is the son of a fisherman while Kino is the son of a farmer, and that makes a huge difference in their lives when the big wave hits the shore. When the big wave comes, everybody fears. The big wave takes away Jiya's father, mother, and brother, Jiya is very sad. He runs to Kino's house. At first few days, Jiya sleeps all day. After few days, he is awake. An old Gentleman comes and wants Jiya to be his son. He says he will send him to a good school. But Jiya says"NO" and at last he live with Kino's family.

    Few years later, Jiya marries Kino's sister, Setsu and builds house on the shore. Jiya and Setsu live there happily.

Very nice Mark. You got all the key parts of the story and you used the present tense throughout.  I will send you some additional comments. But I can see already that you have made great progress. I am impressed. Well done! L.

Pearl Buck’s The Big Wave tells the　story of Jiya and Kino ,who spend their time on swimming and fishing,  jiya is a  fishman’s  son. One day, the big wave comes, jiya’ family are all dead at the big wave, jiya’s  family are all dead at the big wave .Jiya goes to Kino’s home and sleeps all the day. One day  , an old gentleman comes to Kino’s home, and wants to  thaks  jiya to a good school, jiya says No, and he stay at Kino’s home.

    At last Jiya marries with Setsu ,and the live happily together.

Hi Cindy, It's very good that you covered the main events, and in almost every sentence correctly used the present tense. I would be even more pleased if I could get you to write just a little bit more. But you have an excuse, it being your birthday celebration and all. 

I will send you some comments via e-mail before the class arrives.

Laraine

Hello,Laraine     

    Pearl Buck's The Big Wave tells the story of Jiya and Kino, two young boys who spend their days swimming and fishing.  Jiya is the son of a fisherman while Kino is the son of a farmer, and that makes a huge difference in their lives when the big wave hits the shore. Jiya's family lose in the sea,,Jiya has  alive.The old Gentleman wants Jiya to be his son,but Jiya says:"No!"So,Jiya lives with Kino's family.A few years after,Jiya and Kino grow to young men,Setsu grows to a young woman,Jiya marrys with Setsu,and they live together.

Hi Enya, This is lovely. I like very much the way you used a transition "A few years after" to link the last two sentences together. I also  like the repetition of patterns in the second to last sentence  "Jiya and Kino grow [to be] young men, Setsu grows to [be] a young woman." That kind of conscious repetition is what skilled writers do.  I will e-mail you some further comments. Thank you for contributing.  Laraine