Reading and Writing Assignment for 6th class 1/15

    Eleanor Estes’s The Hundred Dresses features three little girls, Wanda, Peggy and Maddie. They are on same age, but they have the different character.

    Wanda is a daughter of a poor family. She is silence most of times, even when Peggy is teething her. But I think she is confidence because she didn't yield Peggy‘s teething.

    Peggy is popular, the majority of the girls in her class are her friends, but she teeth Wanda and makes fun of her a lot, that is bad. But she be nice to other girls, so she has lots of friends.

    Maddie is kind, and she teeth Wanda with Peggy at first, and she is Peggy's most close friend, too. But after some time, she starts afraid of Peggy and Peggy's other friends maybe will teeth her like teeth Wanda, so she hoped Peggy stop teething Wanda.

Hi Mark, You got the structure exactly right, perfect in fact. Nice use, too, of a transition here, "But after some time, she starts...." The transition does exactly what it is supposed to do: It tells the reader to expect a change in the writer's thinking.

 Good use of advanced words like "majority" and "yield" as well. 

I will e-mail you with some additional comments. Best, Laraine

Eleanor Este’s  the hundred dresses have three main characters: Wanda Peggy and Maddie. They are all in same age, but they don’t have the same character.

Wanda is a persistent girl, she doesn’t  have the hundred dresses actually, but she draws the hundred dresses to make it become true. She is a magnanimous girl too. When Peggy and Maddie  make fun with her, she didn’t  say anything to attack them. At last she still draws two dresses for Peggy and Maddie. She is really magnanimous.

Peggy is an extroversion girl, but she was too acrimonious, she always makes fun with Wanda. If she not makes fun with Wanda, she and Wanda are going to be good friends.

Maddie  isn’t  a girl like Peggy, she is poor too, but she has a friend—Peggy. She looks the friendship very hard. If the girl make fun with Wanda isn’t  Peggy, I thing she will contradict her. But the girl is Peggy; she doesn’t  want to lose her friend, so she looks the friendship very hard. 

Very nice Cindy. I see, too, that you have read to the end of the book before it was assigned. That makes me happy because it means that you enjoyed the story.

This is also a lovely transition helping connect the paragraphs, "Maggie isn't a girl like Peggy, she is poor too."

I will send you more comments via e-mail, but I see you trying out some new things in your writing, like the use of the dash--"but she has a friend--Peggy." That's great. That's how writing works. The writer plays with different kinds of words and punctuation, along with sentence length and word order and choice and figures out what would work best for his or her purpose. To me, that's the real joy of writing, figuring out every time how to get what's in your head on to the page.  I see you really thinking here.  Nice work. Laraine

Hello,Laraine

   Eleanor Estes’s The Hundred Dresses features three little girls, Wanda, Peggy and Maddie. Similar in age, they are very different in character and personality.

  Maddie is a poor girl,she is Peggy's best friend.She don't agree Peggy has fun from Wanda,she didn't tells what she think to Peggy,because she doesn't want to lose a friend.But she is kind:she pity Wanda,because she is poor,too.

 Wanda is a poor girl,She alway doesn't say any thing,but I think she is firm:when Peggy "have fun with her,she does't angry.And she draw hundred dresses to make herself feel she is not poor.

Peggy is a girl that almost every one like,she is where the fun from.But she sometimes is bad to Wanda,she is selfish sometimes,when she has fun with Wanda,she doesn't care about how Maddie feels.

Hi Enya, I think you have an excellent grasp of each character. I am also glad to see that you used the colon exactly right:"But she is kind:she pity Wanda,because she is poor,too." I also very much like your explanation of why Wanda talked about the hundred dresses supposedly hanging in her closet:"And she draw hundred dresses to make herself feel she is not poor." That is a very astute insight.

I will e-mail you some additional comments.  Good work! Laraine

P.S.You were great today in your role as Wanda. Your tone of voice perfectly caught Wanda's character.