Homework Assignment for 8th Class

Derica's reply:

The setting: in the Shin Hoo’s restaurant after the first explosion in the coffee shop
People who were talking: Chris and Sydelle.
Sydelle: I know it will be kind of disrespect to say, but it was nice to have dinner with a person who had a little physical defect just like me. Finally I have some free time not worrying about how others have commends on my wide hipped or my crutch.
Chris didn’t replied but smiled a little bit, the smile could break your heart.
Sydelle(very excited): are there any one that you suspicious was the bomber?
Chris: no, I was afr—aid when the ex--plotion hap-pend. My fat—her was cov--ered by bl-0od
Sydelle: oh, honey, it was not blood, he was covered by the tomato sauces, the sauces can was explode because of the bomb. Fortunately, no one was hurt. Oh my, what a nasty turn, the afternoon was supposed to be beautiful and peaceful.
Chris: I am s-orry that, they had to re—decorate the en—tire kit—chen.
Sydelle: there had lots of bad things happened: the kitchen exploded, my shorthand notebook was stolen by a unknown person. That bratty turtle came to my room yesterday, she said that Angela stole the notebook. Of course I won’t believe her, because my partner was good person. I won’t believe that naughty girl who put her dirty shoes on my coach and insult my body shape and blamed my good partner.
Chris: don’—t be so an-gry, she was not on pur-pose. Some peo-ple just react the way that they wan--ted to let o--ther see, may--be in the deep of her he--art it was kind as An--gela’s
Sydelle: you’re quite right, lets drop any thong bothered up and enjoy the dinner.

The setting: in the Shin Hoo’s restaurant after the first explosion in the coffee shop
People who were talking: Chris and Sydelle.
Sydelle: I know it will be kind of disrespect to say, but it was nice to have dinner with a person who had a little physical defect just like me. Finally I have some free time not worrying about how others have commends on my wide hipped or my crutch.
Chris didn’t replied but smiled a little bit, the smile could break your heart.
Sydelle(very excited): are there any one that you suspicious was the bomber?
Chris: no, I was afr—aid when the ex--plotion hap-pend. My fat—her was cov--ered by bl-0od
Sydelle: oh, honey, it was not blood, he was covered by the tomato sauces, the sauces can was explode because of the bomb. Fortunately, no one was hurt. Oh my, what a nasty turn, the afternoon was supposed to be beautiful and peaceful.
Chris: I am s-orry that, they had to re—decorate the en—tire kit—chen.
Sydelle: there had lots of bad things happened: the kitchen exploded, my shorthand notebook was stolen by a unknown person. That bratty turtle came to my room yesterday, she said that Angela stole the notebook. Of course I won’t believe her, because my partner was good person. I won’t believe that naughty girl who put her dirty shoes on my coach and insult my body shape and blamed my good partner.
Chris: don’—t be so an-gry, she was not on pur-pose. Some peo-ple just react the way that they wan--ted to let o--ther see, may--be in the deep of her he--art it was kind as An--gela’s
Sydelle: you’re quite right, lets drop any thong bothered up and enjoy the dinner.

Hi Derica, I can tell that you enjoyed this assignment. Your choice of words, pauses, characterizations and setting is intimate and in-sync with The Westing Game's storyline. I like how you shaped a dialogue between Chris and Sydelle, two characters with bodily issues that is crippling them physically, socially and psychologically. Your use of stream of consciousness to reveal chris's thoughts is genius. More importantly, you had a clear vision for this assignment and you accomplished it. You provided a snapshot of what paired heirs might talk about when they are not center stage. For example, you used Ms. Pulaski to digress about her wide hips and mistrust of Turtle with Chris. These are things people might talk about in a private setting with a partner. However, though your conversation was complexed and layered, please dedicate time to tend to grammatical errs, because errors and misuse of words could dramatically alter your vision. Lastly, continue to infuse newly learnt words to elevate your writings and show that you are taking your vocabulary journal seriously. Nonetheless, great job; I thoroughly enjoyed reading your characters' conversation.