You did a great job on this Alfonso. And I love how you incorporated the metaphor from the book, "pillar of fire" into your own writing.
Your use of transitions is excellent and I really like the opening transition to the second paragraph, "I am just like her." Particularly when you are introducing a new and key point, as you are here, these kinds of short, direct transitional sentences are just perfect for getting the reader both ready and interested in what follows.
You are also using much more sentence variety than you once did.
I owe you some comments on your writing, and I will get them to you. I promise.
You have such a great poker face, when you want to use it, I bet no one even noticed you dropped anything.